The Mystic - Script Reviewing (Proper Script)

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I will deffinetly take what u said in to consideration, im not the kind of person that gets OVERLY possesive of my work, unless somebody just says its shit without actually constructily critising.

Ok so water down the dialog, and format it correctly. I will backup that one and start doing so.

I'v actually calculated the movie to be 95 Minutes. Al the bits in the script where he is walking, will take longer then it writes.

Thanks, Anyone else read it?

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Sorry to double post.

I have made the script..erm verticle, i think people call it. And made it courior 12. Which makes it in my eyes ugly, but its proper formatting so...it should be ok for others.

I didnt water down teh script. I sort of think it is ok, but Im going to change the way teh story of eden is, because if its all voice over, it will become very silly.

I have added some more conglivt by intorducing a character names Trayal... A buddy from his village. And also deleted the Whole dream world..to cliche.

I would love some more story critisisim, what did you think of joan? or the Eden story ect.

Do you think audiances would like my vision in this movie? I dont want to make it for just my enjoyment, i would liek others to enjoy it as well.

Im thinking about maing the film stylistic with certain qualities, like the rain filling sureal, the colors overly vibrant (What Dreams May Come Vibrant)

I never saw the Staw wars likeness to be honest, but now i see the whole village fire, parents dead, obione..err i mean monk setting him in the right direction, that was all unitentional.

On the otherhand, the king arthur and jesus were not. I felt it added to the story.

I like the matrix. *goofy smile*.

What lines made you especially want to wack Jasper?

Anyway looking foward to responses.

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Updated the Main Link, Now you can download Proper Formatted Script... [img]smile.gif[/img]